His own work, but shouldn't have ended his paper with a quotation
Met requirement for word count; 4,000 words
Did not employ MLA Format
Repeatedly used both "I" and "my" when the paper states it's suppose to be in third person
1. I watch CNN, as previously noted, and the assessment there too is U.S. troop strength is still thin, even with the measures taken to supplement the forces.
Sloppy argument, wasn't necessarily clear on his thesis on where he stood on the matter
Argument wasn't phrased in a way that we would believe it was his argument, rather than have us feel it's just his own opinion.
1. Obviously, reinstating compulsory service is a benefit to the United States by not only reintroducing citizen pride in defending America, but also by unifying America as a whole.
2. Moreover, draft opponents contend that compulsory national service will be too costly for an already severely economically challenged United States.
When using transition words, he used repetitive words that wasn't engaging for the reader
Works Cited..
1. So states Charles Moskos, late professor of sociology for Northwestern University, recipient of the Distinguished Service Award for the U.S. Army, and a draftee for the U.S. Army Combat Engineers (Moskos)
2. This lack of balance is unsustainable in the long term” (28).
He didn't build his case logically in a systematic order of presentation
1. It must be fought for, protected, and handed on for them to do the same, or one day we will spend our sunset years telling our children and our children’s children what it was once like in the United States where men were free (qtd. in “Learn").
Overall grade, C+
